Creative Writing - Show Not Tell

What do you think “show don’t tell” means?

Show don't tell- Show don't tell means mean's instead of telling what the character is doing you show his/her expressions like showing how the person is upset, angry and show how he is feeling that and what is he/she doing that makes the reader think that the expression or action of the character is Happy or Sad.

Task- Rewrite these sentences to “show” and not “tell”?

The buildings were tall

The extremely tall buildings peaked through the clouds.

Sarah was really upset

A tear was falling down sarah's sad face.

The lake was beautiful.

The sun shined accros the beautiful sparkly lake.

The Beatles (Let It Be)

Artist: The Beatles

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QDYfEBY9NM4

What does the song "Let it be about"?
-Beatlemania

It begins with Paul saying how when he finds himself in times of trouble, "Mother Mary" comes to him.  I had always thought that Mary means the virgin Mary, the mother of Jesus. But Paul's mother was also named Mary, and she died when he was a young boy. Paul has said in interviews that when he wrote the song he was thinking about his mother.

In the song Mary comes like an angel whispering to him these wise words-- let it be. "Let it be" means let go, relax, don't worry about your troubles.  These are words of comfort, reminding us not to think about sad things too much, to accept the bad things that have happened that we cannot change.

But this is not the only message in Paul's song. Next, he lifts the listener up and out of his own life, soon he is singing about all the broken-hearted people in the world, people who hate each other or are at war. "Although they may be parted, there is still a chance that they will see. There will be an answer-- Let it be."

This time the words "Let it be" have a different meaning.  "Let it be" here does not mean to just relax about our problems and accept bad things.  It means "let it happen"-- let some new world, a happier and more peaceful world, become a reality.

When Paul wrote this song in 1969 there was violence in Ireland, wars happening in Vietnam and around the world.  So he was speaking about sad and angry people who are fighting one another all over the world. We still have situations like this today, with broken-hearted people fighting each other in Pakistan and India, or Palestine and Israel.

I think this song is Paul McCartney's greatest work. It gives us his vision for peace. It is similar in some ways to the song "Imagine," which John Lennon wrote several years later. Both songs give us hope of a happier and more peaceful world.

The Lyrics-

When I find myself in times of trouble, Mother Mary comes to me
Speaking words of wisdom, let it be
And in my hour of darkness, she is standing right in front of me
Speaking words of wisdom, let it be

Let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
Whisper words of wisdom, let it be

And when the broken-hearted people living in the world agree
There will be an answer, let it be
For though they may be parted, there is still a chance that they will see
There will be an answer, let it be

Let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
There will be an answer, let it be

Let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
Whisper words of wisdom, let it be

Let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
Whisper words of wisdom, let it be, be

And when the night is cloudy there is still a light that shines on me
Shinin' until tomorrow, let it be
I wake up to the sound of music, Mother Mary comes to me
Speaking words of wisdom, let it be

And let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
Whisper words of wisdom, let it be

And let it be, let it be, let it be, let it be
Whisper words of wisdom, let it be

Parihaka- Tim Finn And The Hearbs

My friend, My friend, I hate to see you suffer,

Events conspire to bring us to our knees,

My friend, my friend, you've taken this the wrong way, 

Rise up, defend yourself, never give in,

Look to the sky, the spirit of Te Whiti,

The endless tide is murmuring his name. 

I know Te Whiti will never be defeated,

And even at the darkest hour,

His presence will remain.

I'll sing to you the song of Parihaka.

Te Whiti he used the language of the spirit,

Then stood accused, the madman and his dream,

He saw the train go roaring through the tunnel,

He heard the voice travel on the magic wire,

But he loved the silence of the river,

He watched the dog piss on the cannon's wheel.

I know Te Whiti will never be defeated,

And even at the darkest hour,

His presence will remain.

I'll sing to you the song of Parihaka.

One day you'll know the truth,

They can't pull out the roots,

Come and take me home,

To weep for my lost brother.

They gather still, the clouds of Taranaki,

His children's children wearing the white plume,

So take me for the sins of these sad islands,

The wave still breaks on the rock of Rouhotu.

And when you taste the salt that's on your pudding,

And when you taste the sugar in your soup,

Think of Te Whiti, he'll never be defeated,

Even at the darkest hour,

His presence will remain,

I'll sing for you the song of Parihaka,

Come to Parihaka,

Weep for my lost brother,

The spirit of nonviolence,

Has come to fill the silence, Come to Parihaka.

What is the main message of this song? The main message in the song is to share what happened and to spread awareness about it.

What does you can't pull out the roots refer too? This refers to there ancestors and background but also the land that they own. Saying you can't take this away from us.

How does this song show the significance of Parihaka? The song shows significance because people are still affected by these events that happened.

The Haka - Ka mate

Ka mate, ka mate! ka ora! ka ora! Ka mate! ka mate! ka ora! ka ora! Tēnei te tangata pūhuruhuru Nāna nei I tiki mai whakawhiti te rā Ā, upane! ka upane! Ā, upane, ka upane, whiti te ra! 'Tis death! 'tis death! (or: I may die) 'Tis life! 'tis life! (or: I may live) 'Tis death! 'tis death! 'Tis life! 'tis life! This is the hairy man Who summons the sun and makes it shine A step upward, another step upward! A step upward, another... the Sun shines! The man who led New Zealand troops in the first Anzac Day service in 1916 was also one whose fighting style against the Turkish soldiers had a uniquely Kiwi hallmark. To the end, Captain Pirimi Tahiwi - at various points, a schoolteacher, Maori All Black, and musician, known as Uncle Prim to Rupene Waaka, one of his living descendants, and his whanau - remained a military man. Pirimi Tahiti, in a photo showing officers of the New Zealand Pioneer Battalion in 1919.  "He walked as an officer, and relayed himself as a gentleman, with not a hair or a crease out of place, and he held himself with a ramrod-straight back - he walked round like an officer, which he was." "My grandfather was his youngest brother. We called him grand uncle." Pirimi had served with the Territorial Force as a private, and at the outbreak of war, signed up with the Maori Contingent of the New Zealand Expeditionary Force, where, as a schoolteacher, he was promoted to officer. "Our Pakeha boys landed on the 25th of April. About a week or two afterwards, we landed. I suppose they wondered who on earth all these savages were," Pirimi said. He was one of those commanding 70 soldiers ordered to attack and clear an enemy trench in the battle for Sari Bair, in August 1915, whose request for extra reinforcements was denied. Undeterred, they drew on everything they had. "We didn't want to go back, so we went ahead on our own. We thought a good way to try and frighten the enemy as well as to repeat this Maori haka, 'Ka Mate Ka Mate'." Rupene is understandably proud of his uncle. "It'd be a bit whakahihi - a bit blowing one's own trumpet - if we said that Uncle Prim led the haka: he was in there, and that's what officers got to do - blow the whistle, charge. "It was echoed through the trenches and before they set off, 'Ka Mate, Ka Mate'." In the darkness, they couldn't see the other men, but the haka did the trick for Pirimi and his men. "They may have put the fear of God into them, we didn't have to put any bayonet through any of them at all - I mean, I suppose the haka was enough for them." After the attack, they were ordered to the beach, for a smoko and to have a break, but the success of the victory was short-lived. "When Uncle was seriously wounded on Gallipoli, he took a drink from his water bottle, and a sniper got him. Just missed his jugular," Rupene remembers. Captain Tahiwi narrowly escaped a more serious injury: "The Turkish bullet shot me in right through the neck, went right down the spine paralysing the whole of my right side." "Doctor Buck was alongside me. He put his finger right through the hole, and I can still remember him saying, 'You're all right Prim, don't worry, you're all right.'" While convalescing in England, Captain Tahiwi led New Zealand troops at the first Anzac Day service in 1916, and returned to Gallipoli for the 50th commemorations. He took a pounamu mere with him, laid it on the memorial at Chunuk Bair, and quietly gave a karakia. For his whanau, Captain Tahiwi's service and actions are a source of great pride. "It's outstanding because their first language was Te Reo Maori - they were brought up in a totally Maori environment, but at the same time, they were educated. He didn't walk away from his culture." reference-https://www.rnz.co.nz/news/national/271343/'the-haka-did-the-trick'

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